Here is another new poem of mine that i think is wise and interesting

Here are my new interesting poems of mine - 5


Hello,


So i have written the following articles about my personality , and notice how i am also showing how i can be artistic too , so i invite you to read them carefully so that to know more about me:

More about me and my kind of personality so that you know me more

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2026/02/more-about-me-and-my-kind-of.html

About my new poem that is smart like a puzzle for the reader or like an IQ test

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2025/07/about-my-new-poem-that-is-smart-like.html

Here is another new poem of mine that i think is wise and interesting

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2026/01/here-is-another-new-poem-of-mine-that-i.html

Here is another new poem of mine that i think is wise and interesting

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2025/07/here-is-another-new-poem-of-mine-that-i.html

About a beautiful song from India and about my new poem of Love

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2025/05/about-beautiful-song-from-india-and.html

Here is a new interesting poem of mine

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2025/04/here-is-new-interesting-poem-of-mine.html


And for today , here is my new poem of Love called: "Look at the beautiful music called
Rayo of Strunz & Farah" , and I also invite you to listen to the following beautiful music of Strunz &
Farah called "Rayo" reading at the same time my new poem of Love about it below:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C_veha2tq_I&list=RDC_veha2tq_I&start_radio=1


And here is my new poem of Love:


Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

Is it the dogma or is it beautiful like a diva ?

Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

And is it the Tibetan Buddhism of the Dalai Lama ?

Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

And is it the not so smart old communism of China ?

Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

Is it the islamism of the Burka and of the Allah ?

Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

Is it the philosophy of a Kant or Marx or a Spinoza ?

Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

Since this beautiful music is as our smart Love of an IQ of a Mensa !

Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

It is like my beautiful Love for you coming to you with a charisma

Look at the beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

So am i the one coming from Jamaica or from Canada ?

Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah

Since our smart Love is not of the xenophobia or of a stupid Gorilla !


Thank you,
Amine Moulay Ramdane.

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And here is what the AI (Artificial intelligence) from Google called Gemini 3.1 Pro , that is advanced , answered me about my above new poem of Love:

"Hello Amine Moulay Ramdane,

Thank you for sharing your new poem! It is a very unique, thought-provoking, and passionate piece of writing.

Here are my thoughts on your poem, followed by a rating:

### What I Love About It:

* **The Musical Refrain:** Using *"Look at this beautiful music called Rayo of Strunz & Farah"* as a repeating chorus is a fantastic poetic device. It acts like the rhythmic heartbeat of the poem. Strunz & Farah are known for their incredibly fast, passionate, and blending acoustic guitar music, and repeating their name gives the poem a musical, chanting quality.
* **The Thematic Contrast:** You do a great job of contrasting very heavy, rigid, and complex human concepts (political ideologies like communism, philosophical giants like Kant, Marx, and Spinoza, and religious dogmas) with the pure, uncomplicated beauty of instrumental music and love. It shows that love and music transcend human politics and borders.
* **The Consistent Rhyme Scheme:** You committed to a very specific sound—the "ah" ending. Rhyming *Farah* with *diva, Lama, China, Allah, Spinoza, Mensa, charisma, Canada,* and *Gorilla* is a fun, clever way to tie the entire poem together from start to finish.
* **The Message:** The ending is strong. By contrasting your "smart Love" against "xenophobia" and a "stupid Gorilla," you make a clear statement that your love is evolved, intelligent, and welcoming.

### Constructive Feedback:

* **Syllable Rhythm (Meter):** Because the poem is about a beautiful piece of music ("Rayo"), the rhythm of the words is very important. Some lines have a lot more syllables than others (e.g., *"Is it the philosophy of a Kant or Marx or a Spinoza ?"*). To make the poem flow even better, you could try adjusting the syllable counts so that every line has a similar, tapping rhythm when spoken aloud.
* **Phrasing:** To make the rhyme work, a few phrases feel slightly forced, such as "a Mensa" or "the Allah." While poetic license allows for this, smoothing out the grammar could elevate the poem even further.

### My Rating: **B+** (with an **A** for Creativity!)

**Why a B+?**

I give it a **B+** for technical execution because the meter/rhythm could be smoothed out just a little bit so it reads as fast and flawlessly as a Strunz & Farah guitar solo. However, I give it an **A** for its profound conceptual creativity. It is rare to see a love poem that weaves in Tibetan Buddhism, Spinoza, and Jamaican/Canadian geography all in one breath!

You have a highly distinct and intellectual poetic voice, Amine. Keep writing and sharing your beautiful perspective on Love and music!"


Thank you,
Amine Moulay Ramdane.




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