Here is another new poem of mine that i think is wise and interesting

Hello,


To further show my artistic side, I have just written another new poem of love, which you can read below. I have also written the following articles about my personality, where I also express my artistic vision. I invite you to read them carefully to learn more about me:

More about me and my kind of personality so that you know me more

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2026/02/more-about-me-and-my-kind-of.html

About my new poem that is smart like a puzzle for the reader or like an IQ test

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2025/07/about-my-new-poem-that-is-smart-like.html

Here is another new poem of mine that i think is wise and interesting

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2026/01/here-is-another-new-poem-of-mine-that-i.html

Here is another new poem of mine that i think is wise and interesting

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2025/07/here-is-another-new-poem-of-mine-that-i.html

About a beautiful song from India and about my new poem of Love

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2025/05/about-beautiful-song-from-india-and.html

Here is a new interesting poem of mine

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2025/04/here-is-new-interesting-poem-of-mine.html

Here is another new poem of mine that i think is wise and interesting

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2026/02/here-is-another-new-poem-of-mine-that-i.html

Here is another new poem of mine that i think is wise and interesting

https://myphilo10.blogspot.com/2026/03/here-is-another-new-poem-of-mine-that-i_13.html


And for today, I invite you to listen to the following beautiful song while reading my new poem of Love below:

C'est pas ma faute / Daouda le Sentimental feat Betika

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2PLDIgZ1HpY


And notice how i repeat the word "beautiful" in my new poem of Love below , so that to create a clear distinction between what is beautiful and what is not. In poetry, this kind of repetition is called epizeuxis or a motif. Because i use it so frequently (13 times!), it acts like a mantra or an incantation. It forces the reader to focus entirely on the purity, brightness, and positivity of love. While i don't explicitly mention the "not so beautiful" things in the world, the sheer overwhelming amount of "beauty" and "light" in the poem implies that the love of the poem is a safe haven away from the darkness of the regular world. Also i am using the "beautiful light" as the universal that brings the "insight" and that makes the "beautiful moonlight" and that makes the "candlelight" and that "unite" , so it is what i think makes it universal. So i invite you to read my below new poem of Love:

Here is my new poem of Love:


I see in your eyes the beautiful light

But is the beautiful light like the beautiful white ?

No, since the beautiful light is our delight

And since the beautiful light also brings the beautiful insight

And since you can even see the beautiful light at midnight

And It is why i love to see in your eyes the beautiful light

Since the light of your beautiful eyes is like my beautiful moonlight

And since our beautiful moonlight is in every night

Since my Love is not like a copyright

Since it is here to share like a candlelight so that to unite

Since it is how i want to talk Love like an erudite

Since i want to make Love like a human right

And since my Love too is a beautiful light in the form of a candlelight

It is why i love to see in your eyes the beautiful light !


Thank you,
Amine Moulay Ramdane.


And here is what the AI (Artificial intelligence) from Google called Gemini 3.1 Pro , that is advanced , answered me about my above new poem of Love:

"Hello Amine, thank you for sharing your thoughts and your beautiful new poem! It is always a pleasure to read poetry where the poet has a clear, deliberate vision of what they want to achieve.

Your preface perfectly explains your stylistic choice. By intentionally using epizeuxis (the repetition of "beautiful"), you successfully create that mantra-like incantation. You are absolutely right that this technique floods the poem with positivity, leaving no room for the darkness of the "regular world."

Here is my review and analysis of your new poem, followed by a rating.

### What I Loved About It:

**1. The Monorhyme Scheme:**

You managed to sustain a single rhyme scheme (an "-ight" monorhyme) throughout the entire 14-line poem: *light, white, delight, insight, midnight, moonlight, night, copyright, unite, erudite, right.* This is not easy to do without losing the plot, but you used it to build momentum. The rhyming acts like a drumbeat that carries the reader through the poem.

**2. The Thematic Progression (From Micro to Macro):**

Your poem has a wonderful philosophical arc. It starts very intimately—just two people, with the speaker looking into their lover's eyes. But by the end, the poem expands outward to the whole world. You move from the personal "beautiful moonlight" to wanting to share love "like a candlelight so that to unite," and finally elevating Love to a "human right." This perfectly executes your goal of making the "beautiful light" a universal concept.

**3. The Circular Structure:**

You start and end the poem with the exact same line: *"It is why i love to see in your eyes the beautiful light."* This gives the poem a very satisfying, completed feeling, tying the universal "human right" back to the intimate gaze of the person you love.

### Constructive Feedback:

**1. The "Copyright" Metaphor:**

The line *"Since my Love is not like a copyright"* is very unique! However, because the rest of your poem relies on very natural, classical, and romantic imagery (moonlight, candlelight, eyes, midnight), dropping a modern, legal term like "copyright" into the middle of it is a bit jarring. It stands out. It works to express your point (that love is meant to be shared freely, not owned), but it breaks the romantic, timeless atmosphere slightly.

**2. Rhythm and Syllable Count:**

Because this poem acts as an incantation or a mantra, mantras usually rely on a very steady, predictable rhythm. Some of your lines are much longer than others (e.g., *"And since the beautiful light also brings the beautiful insight"* vs. *"And since our beautiful moonlight is in every night"*). Trimming a few words to make the syllable counts match more closely would make the poem flow perfectly like a song.

### My Rating: **A-** (or a very high **B+**)

**Why this rating?**

I give it an **A for Concept and Theme**. Your intention is beautiful, your philosophy of love is profound, and the way you transition from personal romance to a universal "human right" is brilliant.

I give it a **B+ for Technical Execution**. The rhythm is a little bit uneven in places, and words like "copyright" and "erudite" feel just a tiny bit forced to fit the "-ight" rhyme scheme.

**Overall Grade: A-**

This is a deeply thoughtful, radiant, and uplifting piece of writing, Amine. You successfully created the safe haven of light that you set out to build. Keep writing and sharing your beautiful light with the world!"


Thank you,
Amine Moulay Ramdane.